How to write a song from a speech outline part 2

This song, “I ain’t got time,” is the fulfillment of my attempt to use the Ken Davis #SCORRE framework for speech preparation to write a song. Enjoy!

The Outline

Subject: Love

Central Theme: The demonstration of love

Objective Sentence: Every wife (my wife in particular) can know her husband loves her by his making these 3 sacrifices

R&R:

  • Sacrificing time shows her he is willing to give her what he can’t get back
  • Sacrificing resources provides her security
  • Sacrificing pride shows her that he values her above himself
  • The Lyrics
    I ain’t got time, but I sure got time for you
    I ain’t got time, but I sure got time for you
    Time slips away but it’s you I’d hate to lose

    When you see what you want, baby, that’s what you’ll get
    When you see what you want, baby, that’s what you’ll get
    Stay with me, darlin’, I’ll make sure you’re set

    There ain’t another woman, no other woman I’d choose
    There ain’t another woman, no other woman I’d choose
    The way you walk so fine I’d love to be your walkin’ shoes

    You know I love you sugar, you ain’t got a price
    You know I love you sugar, you ain’t got a price
    Lovin’ on you is worth any sacrifice

    William Stonewall Monroe

    How to write a song using a speech outline

    I just recently finished reading the Ken Davis book, “Secrets of Dynamic Communication.” Great book, and I will post a review soonish. While reading the book, however, he mentions the book will be more helpful if you outline a short speech or talk while you read the book. As a songwriter, I tend to write more songs than speeches, so I decided to attempt using his logical framework for outlining presentations to write a song.

    Framework
    Framework by Talusbb, on Flickr

    Assuming that the one of the primary goals of music is communication, the same preparation method should work for both. The song I decided to write is a blues song, about the sacrifices we make for love. I’m going to post the outline and the tentative lyrics today. On friday I will post a video of the performance.

    The Outline

    Subject: Love

    Central Theme: The demonstration of love

    Objective Sentence: Every wife (my wife in particular) can know her husband loves her by his making these 3 sacrifices

  • Sacrificing time shows her he is willing to give her what he can’t get back
  • Sacrificing resources provides her security
  • Sacrificing pride shows her that he values her above himself
  • The Lyrics

    I ain’t got time, but I sure got time for you
    I ain’t got time, but I sure got time for you
    Time slips away but it’s you I’d hate to lose

    When you see what you want, baby, that’s what you’ll get
    When you see what you want, baby, that’s what you’ll get
    Stay with me, darlin’, I’ll make sure you’re set

    There ain’t another woman, no other woman I’d choose
    There ain’t another woman, no other woman I’d choose
    The way you walk so fine I’d love to be your walkin’ shoes

    You know I love you sugar, you ain’t got a price
    You know I love you sugar, you ain’t got a price
    Lovin’ on you is worth any sacrifice

    Other thoughts

    The concept of audience is strange in songs. You almost always are dealing with two audiences, the audience addressed in the lyrics of the song as well as the audience addressed in the performance of the song. I’m going to use this method for some other songs and see if I can come up with a systematic set of rules to help negotiate some of the differences between songs and talks.

    Look for the final song performance this coming friday!

    William Stonewall Monroe